April 10, 2005
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People! I woke up and had no comments. Count ‘em: 0. Look, if you don’t like it tell me. If it seems like I shouldn’t be exposing — If you think that I am stepping over some moral boundries, say so. Haven’t I always been straight-up with you? I need to know what your reaction is. I mean I figure the writing is okay, it’s the subject matter that has me worried. And the slant. I’m worried about how I sound because you know I’m — I’m still struggling with my departure from that world and maybe I — As a narrator I worry about imposing myself. Please.
Comments (6)
If I’d been able to read it, I’d have likely commented.
F
I second the first comment.
And, for what it’s worth, I often find that my most heartfelt and genuine blogs get very few comments, while the mundane day to day ones seem to get all kinds of response.
It all depends on what you want to expose: the barest facts about the event(s) or some inner observance/awakening/interpretation? I don’t think anything you wrote is particularly negative. In fact there were some very positive statements in there.
I have to say, I really like the way you write about the dancing and the dancers; it’s very enjoyable reading. I like the observations and speculations. I can also see why you might not want certain people to read it. But I think you can get around that and still put all the other stuff in.
I’m probably not being very clear about this. What I’m saying is that bare facts, in this case, may not be enough. The meat is in the feelings, and there is no reason you should exclude yourself because your the narrator. If this is straight reporting, fine, narrator has no business showing herself. But this is ABOUT something other than bare facts. You HAVE to put yourself in there, it’s part of what happened.
I still feel like I’m not making any sense. Duh. Maybe you should re-write it all just as you would have it appear to EVERYBODY (but keep it protected again) and see what happens. Sorry I’m not much help.
T
Oh darn, sorry- going back to read- I promise to comment more.
Sorry, I was a bum this weekend, but I’ve seen the “light”
go get em’ Pru
did I miss sumpthun????