This is the URL to Dr. Mabeuse’s submissions. Sorry — I should have thought of that earlier. He’s one of my favorites.
(if you just copy/paste that into your browser, you should be OK…)
I made a small change in the poem I just wrote, ‘I’m writhing…I am writing’ to ‘we are writing’ & hope that works better – with poetry every tiny word is so weighted! Thanks. xo
i hope you take my comments in the manner of which they were given… with great respect and the desire to give you feedback you can use… i do like the story. i hope that came across. i can get sidetracked by the critical voice… sorry!
Hey! Linked to you from Feith. I know you don’t know me, but if you wanted to add me to protected, I’m interested…
me? i’d keep going!!! and save the editing for later- don’t lose steam or the creative energy until you’re finished… then edit!
i want to write a sex scene now –
i think you need to work on the structure of it — i also wanted to get some description of sound — you know, the pace, the tempo, how the scene build, kinda mirroring the actual act… i don’t like “thumping” — can’t tell you why…feels a little watership down-ish…
but keep going keep going don’t stop don’t let it end oh my yes no mmmm oh please i’m going to be quiet now….
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http://english.literotica.com/stories/memberpage.php?uid=159353&page=submissions
This is the URL to Dr. Mabeuse’s submissions. Sorry — I should have thought of that earlier.
He’s one of my favorites. 
(if you just copy/paste that into your browser, you should be OK…)
I made a small change in the poem I just wrote, ‘I’m writhing…I am writing’ to ‘we are writing’ & hope that works better – with poetry every tiny word is so weighted! Thanks. xo
i hope you take my comments in the manner of which they were given… with great respect and the desire to give you feedback you can use… i do like the story. i hope that came across. i can get sidetracked by the critical voice… sorry!
Hey! Linked to you from Feith. I know you don’t know me, but if you wanted to add me to protected, I’m interested…
me? i’d keep going!!! and save the editing for later- don’t lose steam or the creative energy until you’re finished… then edit!
i want to write a sex scene now –
i think you need to work on the structure of it — i also wanted to get some description of sound — you know, the pace, the tempo, how the scene build, kinda mirroring the actual act…
i don’t like “thumping” — can’t tell you why…feels a little watership down-ish…
but keep going keep going don’t stop don’t let it end oh my yes no mmmm oh please i’m going to be quiet now….
zackfuller