i am behind here! i’ll read and catch up tomorrow… i promise!
No, I think you have adequate dialogue. I found myself wanting to know more about Keith but I know you need to set up the reader with background information, etc. I enjoyed it as it is. Just looking forward to more…
Sweetie, see my comment there ~ I think it does need more dialogue. I understand what you’re setting up, but it could be fleshed out more…
Fabulous writing, of course (didn’t I say that?)~ xo
My only honest thoughts is … that towards the end where you are talking about the belly dancing- it doesn’t seem to fully explain how it relates to your relationship with Jack- it could be another chapter about your passion that you didn’t pursue at one time because of Jack?
I think you shouldn’t worry about the length either- don’t condense a post to save people from having to read longer. YOu are worthy of reading and if they don’t have the time, they better come back or miss out!
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i am behind here! i’ll read and catch up tomorrow… i promise!
No, I think you have adequate dialogue. I found myself wanting to know more about Keith
but I know you need to set up the reader with background information, etc. I enjoyed it as it is. Just looking forward to more…
Sweetie, see my comment there ~ I think it does need more dialogue. I understand what you’re setting up, but it could be fleshed out more…
Fabulous writing, of course (didn’t I say that?)~ xo
My only honest thoughts is … that towards the end where you are talking about the belly dancing- it doesn’t seem to fully explain how it relates to your relationship with Jack- it could be another chapter about your passion that you didn’t pursue at one time because of Jack?
I think you shouldn’t worry about the length either- don’t condense a post to save people from having to read longer. YOu are worthy of reading and if they don’t have the time, they better come back or miss out!